Tuesday, January 21, 2014

Pitch Wars ALT: DM-5: CROSSING FIRE

MENTOR: Molly Lee

ALTERNATE: Samantha Joyce

TITLE: CROSSING FIRE

CATEGORY/GENRE: YA Fantasy Romance

WORD COUNT: 70,000

PITCH: Devica's the rebellious daughter of the devil. Nathan's an innocent - condemned for a crime he didn't commit. Together, they're determined to break out of Hell. And her father's fury won't be their only obstacle.

EXCERPT: Vibrations rippled up Devica's arm as the man pounded on her desk. Out of the corner of her eye, she watched a tower of files topple and sighed.

"I'm not dead! Stop saying that!" He bent over the table, so close she could smell the acrid-scent of alcohol that still perfumed his breath and clothing. His face reminded her of a tomato; red, round and about to burst out of its turtle-necked prison. She really hoped it didn’t. The clean-up would be dreadful.

Devica wiped a smattering of his spittle off her cheek with the back of her hand. “I’m sorry, sir,” she said through gritted teeth. “You’re very much dead.” She glanced at the file in her hand. “You died in a car crash.”

“Impossible! I’ve never been in an accident.”

She held up the report. “This says you were drinking.”

“Well, I had maybe one or two. But I’m a very competent driver; even after a glass of wine.”

Devica stifled a yawn. Shadelings always had a hard time with this part. Her life would be so much easier if they simply accepted their death and moved on.

“You actually had six glasses of wine,” she said. “Then you crashed into a tree after almost running over an old lady.”

“But I didn’t hit her, see? I was sober enough to miss her.”

“She had a heart attack and died two minutes later.”

He blinked. “Well, I can’t be blamed for that. It was obviously just her time.”


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