Wednesday, May 1, 2013

The Writer's Voice Contest Entry #77


“The Writer’s Voice” is a multi-blog, multi-agent contest hosted by Cupid of Cupid’s Literary Connection, Brenda Drake of Brenda Drake Writes, Monica B.W. of Love YA, and Krista Van Dolzer.  I was lucky enough to be selected in the drawing to participate. Below is my query for IMPERFECTLY FINE  and the first 250 words of my manuscript. Enjoy!





THIS ENTRY HAS BEEN WITHDRAWN. Stay tuned. :)
~Dannie

52 comments:

  1. Nice beginning! I hear Skylar's voice loud and clear. I would totally keep reading!

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  2. Oh Skylar! <3 I love this story so much. Good luck with it! :D

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    1. Dude--we have to be on the same team! Like, *have* to! MWAH!

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  3. Love it! I'm definitely interested and would like to read more. Best of luck to you!

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    1. Thanks, Amy! I'm hoping they send an adult contest your way, soon and not you-know-who soon!

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  4. Great job! You pulled me right in. Would definitely keep reading!

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  5. I really love this--it's smart and funny and authentic. Characters feel three dimensional already. Hope this one makes it in!!

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    1. Heather, you just made my day. Thank you!

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  6. I think this is a really interesting angle. I love that her dad is a rockstar and I'm not familiar with cystic fibrosis so for that reason alone, I'd keep reading. Plus, I love how jaded and strong Skylar's voice is.

    Good luck!

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    1. A lot of people aren't, Amber, which is why I think Skylar's story is so important. It's the most common life-limiting genetic disorder in the world. You can find more information on CF here: http://www.cff.org/aboutcf/ if you are interested.

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  7. I love stories dealing with real issues ( i personally knew someone with cystic fibrosis and now how difficult it could be to live with)

    You have a great voice and an effective pitch. Would really want to see how this turns out - Good luck!

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    1. Thank you, Copernicus. Good luck to you as well! Maybe we'll wind up on the same team!

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  8. I think I remember seeing an earlier version of this story a while ago, on a pitch workshop blog hop or something. (I remembered the Cystic Fibrosis element.) It caught my attention then, and it sounds like you've only made it stronger. :)

    Good luck to you! *Hugs!*

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    1. Thanks, Veronica! Good luck to you, too! Yes, she's been around the block a couple times now. Went through a major overhaul in Feb/March and has more of a thriller feel now.

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  9. The query definitely peeked my interest. The manuscript left me wanting to read more.

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  10. I love a book that can make me feel cry, feel angry, and laugh all in a few pages. I get the feeling that this is one of those. Best of luck to you!

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  11. Wendy, your comment gave me big smiles. Thank you!

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  12. Ooooh, great pitch and beginning! Love your hook and voice in the opener. I would definitely read on!

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  13. Loved the voice in your 250 words. Good luck!

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    1. Thanks, Annette! I enjoyed reading yours, too!

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  14. Strong voice in the 250, interesting premise in the query, and it sounds like you have the background to really effectively write this. Good luck!

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    1. Thanks, Ann! Write what you know, right?

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  15. Mine's a thriller, too, so obviously I'm rooting for thrills!! Good luck! Your' MC's has a strong voice.

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    1. Yay, Team Thriller!! **does MJ zombie dance** Good luck to you, too!

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  16. Love the beginning of this! I would definitely keep reading. Good luck!

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  17. Sending baskets of good vibes to you in the contest. *waves from the Writer's Voice list* I appreciate the way your character doesn't feel defined by her disease. I'd dive into this story.

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    1. Thank you, Leslie! No, CF is definitely only one part of Skylar's story. She'd be raging pissed if anyone tried to tell her otherwise! ;) Good luck to you, too!

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  18. I love it Dannie! :) The voice is so great... but then you are so good at voice!

    Good luck!

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  19. My niece has a friend with cystic fibrosis that is so out-going and full of life, it makes me sad to think she could possibly not live past 30! Such an intriguing point of view ~ best of luck to you!

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    1. Donea, there is a lot of variation in life expectancy among CFers. Some live into their fifties or longer, and some die as young children. There is still so much we don't know about this disease. Hopefully in our lifetime CF will stand for "cure found!"

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  20. Cystic fibrosis is a horrible thing to have to live with. My mother-in-law has it and lives in constant pain. Your story sounds awesome and I could already relate to the MC. Good luck!

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    1. Sending healthy vibes to your MIL, Rachel! We will find a cure! Good luck to you as well :)

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  21. This story really touches my heart. Good luck!

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  22. A classmate of mine died from CF my junior year, so I just know this would be a book that would make me sob like a baby. I like the added danger angle, and the voice in your 250 rocks! Luck to you :)

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  23. We need more books about teens with disabilities, I hope you find a home for it!

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  24. Wow! Such a strong voice here. I'm fascinated. Good luck!

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  25. I don't normally go for contemp, but I'd make an exception for this one :) Intrigued! Good luck!

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  26. You sound like you have the qualifications to write this type of story and make it really authentic/believable while also making it approachable for more people to understand cystic fibrosis. I like that while you are dealing with a real, serious issue, the query also has a dangerous tone. Good job!

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  27. Great voice and a unique/intriguing premise. Good luck!!!

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  28. Yes, very good tone in the query. Good luck!

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  29. Nice voice in the sample, and I love this part of the query: Skylar knows Cole is dangerous. She's counting on it.
    But so is Cole.
    Good luck!

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  30. I agree with Angelica. I LOVE that part of your QL! Really pulls you in! Good luck!

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  31. Thanks everyone!! I hope the judges agree! *side eye*

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  32. Hey Dannie,

    My interest is piqued! (Brenda gave me the green light to ask for pages). Would you send me a pitch letter with a one page synopsis and the 1st 50 pages to pooja@kimberleycameron.com? Looking forward to it.

    Pooja Menon
    Kimberley Cameron & Associates

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